Editorial suggestions for Overview section #17
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Signed-off-by: Charles Lanahan <[email protected]>
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Line 50: ", including additional security considerations" - emphasizes that having "additional" security considerations in the transport is one out of many considerations to have. Replacing that with "such as security considerations" may be misinterpreted as requiring or mainly about security considerations. If your edit is mainly about grammatical preference, then I would suggest "such as additional security considerations and others"? TSP does not require you having a secure transport. This point is much more important than grammatical niceties. The rest looks ok. |
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Line 42: one more issue: a new term "trust-based ecosystem" is introduced but I think we should avoid. It's a term of complex meanings that we do not wish to engage with in TSP. It's a good concept in elsewhere, but introducing it here limits TSP and reduces its scope. |
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Roger, will make first edit and remove the second. |
…ations aren't the only ones that the sender has to make
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@wenjing changed per your comments. |
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